Yes, it is a rather abrupt end. I'm not sure slowing it down would help. Might hurt the urgency and surprise of the end. The speed with which is moves mirrors the sudden acceleration of the bus. Maybe speeding up the beginning so it isn't such an abrupt change. But, as far as proper pacing for publishable quality, there definitely is a balance problem. I'm not quite sure how to correct it without damaging the intended effect, but that is something to think about.

Actually, I have been trying to publish for years. Goddamn...maybe 15 years. I started way early, sending out some seriously crappy stuff. Every now and then I take a break. I haven't been focused on trying to publish for about 3 years now. But I think it's time to try again, once I get this new house in order. I have a few recent ideas that need writing and some never before submitted stories that could use a polish before going out.

Do you have any favorite markets for short stories? Places you'd considering sending stuff?